23rd Mar 2014, 5:32 PM
in Death Comes To Tyrion
Cloak and dagger, without the cloak and the dagger.
Dina: Do you think these aliens may have had something to do with the murder?
Ethan: I don't know... but we can't rule out an invasion.
Ethan, I want you to call a meeting of the intel team. Level 2 and up only. I'll pass on these data. Adrienne... I want you to track that girl down and keep an eye on her. Don't do anything else just yet. That means putting on clothes!
Adrienne: Yes, yes...
Dina: You too, Ethan! Do you hear me?
Ethan: Meh.
Ethan: I don't know... but we can't rule out an invasion.
Ethan, I want you to call a meeting of the intel team. Level 2 and up only. I'll pass on these data. Adrienne... I want you to track that girl down and keep an eye on her. Don't do anything else just yet. That means putting on clothes!
Adrienne: Yes, yes...
Dina: You too, Ethan! Do you hear me?
Ethan: Meh.
Average Rating: 5 (3 votes)
1). First and foremost that you are spending more time continuing this wonderful story (weekly).
2). Your plot-line is very interesting - no one has no idea where you going with this and it's totally interesting.
3). Last but not least and this is personal, thank you for integrating "People of Color" with in your story. That means a lot to me personally as a person of color.
You Rock Dud!e
As for point #1, I'm afraid that sticking to a weekly schedule won't be possible - I'm simply not far enough into the next page. But I am working on it in the time I have.